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RAIN p215 - Courage

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Crazy page. So many points I want to make! I’ll focus on the big things.

Brother Arthur’s explanation of how he figured it out actually has a second purpose, moreso from a technical standpoint for me as the writer than anything plot-related. For the longest time, I got really hung up on how Rain could be enrolled in a school like this when her legal name doesn’t match the name she goes by. After all, I’m relatively certain such documents must be presented upon enrollment; the fact is, I don’t know if in real life anyone COULD go through high school without ANYONE knowing who they are. Members of the faculty would probably have to know. It’s a minor, forgettable hole that one could easily overlook because it IS fiction, but I guess it bothers me. Hence, this sort of explains it. Sort of… ish…

Also, I changed the dialogue SO MANY TIMES on this one. This page may have won the award for most dialogue rewrites of any in the story thus far. From Rain’s reaction, to Brother Arthur’s speech, I probably spent a literal day pacing around my apartment working out this dialogue. It’s still a little campy towards the end, but I think I generally like it for the most part.

Anyway, big important page. But I hope you all like it.

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Izelle-ts's avatar

Second panel, third bubble. "someone whose done" > "someone who's done", if I'm not mistaken.


Also, I should say, I just love this page.

(And should I say, Fara's excuses are getting better every time. "It's asthma!" "I've got errands!" "It's a typo!" The fact that it's persistent makes the joke even better.)


(By the way, this should give you an idea of how my translation project is progressing ;) Really, I would like to know if you are ok with me posting it on DA.)