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RAIN p210+211 - Heather by JocelynSamara RAIN p210+211 - Heather by JocelynSamara
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The second page here is extremely experimental, but for obvious reasons, I didnít want it to stand alone. And yet, I also didnít want to leave it out.

Thoughts on ANY part of this are entirely welcome.

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:iconnuric:
nuric Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013
I liked the dramatic twist at the end.   I might be mad at Heather for 'outing' Rain, but it was a good twist.    Structurally, though, the second page would have looked better if, instead of white empty space, you'd have just had pictures of Heather leaving and going home, perhaps just three panels of her walking out the door, across the lawn or up stairs or something similar.
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trichter43 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
D: What a cliff hanger
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OtherSideNight Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I really don't understand how Heather found out...
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Fallenangel2002 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012
lol really long page than a small panle saying Rain's a dude LoL XD
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dolphin64575 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
For a second I thought that second page was going to be a 'just kidding, here's the real panel' thing.
But ASDFPOIUYTRESDJKLOIUYTRDSXCVB NO WORDS
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:icontanooki-tom:
Tanooki-Tom Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012
O_o
...How the HELL did she figure that out?!
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LadySerena Featured By Owner May 22, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Heather broke it. Rain now knows, and Ky how has damn good reason.
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:iconwolf-blazer:
wolf-blazer Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Student Interface Designer
EXPONED!!!
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:iconmoonpuppy4:
moonpuppy4 Featured By Owner May 1, 2012
This should be fun.
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14bj337 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
Ooh! A twofer! ...Or, at least, a full page and an extra panel.

Seriously, though, reading this page was the first time it occurred to me that I actually get an adrenaline rush from reading ironic, awkward, or surprising situations. It's not the first time I've gotten this feeling from Rain, but it is the first time I've identified it as such.

There is something intensely exciting to me about the slip and catch; Heather lets something slip, and Rain catches. Interesting that Heather doesn't appear to notice her mistake at all (does she even know that Kylie hasn't told Rain his full name?), and that Rain doesn't delve further into what Heather said (how sure is she of what she heard?). For Heather, I'd lean more toward ignorance; as for Rain, I bet she knows what she heard, but she doesn't want to be rude (or just wants to hear whatever else Heather has to say). This little slip could fizzle out... or it could lead Rain to unravel Kylie's secret. Assuming, that is, that she isn't too preoccupied with the math test.

Aside from that, though, we have Heather offering Rain some relationship advice. Here, I think Heather's right; Rain should do what she wants to do. So far, Rain's behaved rather passively, trying to do what makes those around her happy before she makes herself happy. Even though Rain is the main character, a few significant character points (most notable among them, her sexuality) remain undeclared. Does Rain like Rudy as more than a friend, as he seems to like her? Should Rain break up with Rudy if she doesn't feel this way? How can she reconcile with Maria? How can she stop making Gavin super horny? Here, I don't think sitting back will do Rain any favors - she needs to act.

The second page is quite interesting; unconventional, compared to what this comic has been so far. The great expanse of white space, it would appear, is meant to isolate the scene from the previous page, both spatially and temporally. It kind of also functions as an awkward pause. I think it works. I don't necessarily like it; perhaps if the white space had been filled just with Heather walking back to her apartment, it would work even better, by lengthening the suspense and sense of time. Just my thought, though.

Of course, we are left wondering: just what caused Heather to come to her conclusion? I'd say she's discovered the truth, but it's really only a half-truth, at best. Still, it seems her tutoring-reconnaisance mission has led her toward what she's trying to figure out. Perhaps, in an upcoming conversation with Kylie, Heather's reasoning will be exposed. While I can't tell anything that "gives her away" from this page or the last, I have to remember that, while Heather's been with Rain the whole time, the audience is only given limited glimpses into their exchange. Still, juicy.

An awesome pair of pages! With every page, some sort of dramatic crash draws ever closer...
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Yin88 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Annd Heather comes to the conclusion of what she's believed! She's certainly kind of had a redeemed sense of character in this page I think. But then, I could just be tired xD;

But yay for developments! Can't wait for the next page! <3
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chitttick1 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
So does this mean Rain knows Kylie is a girl now?
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CloudCoverdMoon Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
How did Heather figure it out? I'm not really to clear on what triggered the realization.
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PrincessJessica Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
oh snap....
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PieGuy993 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Student General Artist
For the second page, if you just want the idea of Rain being a guy to get to the blonde guy whos name escapes me then have Rain's friends be talking about it while he/she walks up behind and hears it
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Musicallover1234 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Student Writer
Well in knew that Heather was trying to figure it out, and she did. And she explained somethings to Rain and hopefully she kick butt on the test. Its interesting how Heather called him/her Kylie instead of Ky i wonder if that will have any important effects later on. And then the last pages in pretty funny where Heather says that she think Rain is a guy.
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VioletUke93 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Shit just got real, well if Fara finds out
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atsuyuri-sama Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
HOW did Heather come to that conclusion?! Also, loving the simplicity of the last page - it makes Heather's announcement stand out quite nicely.
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foggyland1 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
in my opionion it is not something i like but i find that u will listen to the majority and your own oppinion more than the majority (no offense its the logical option and also what i would do).
so yeah thats my opinion.

ps: sorry for the rant.
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quiet-secrets Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Student Photographer
What.
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:iconavistew:
Avistew Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
I think I would have cornered it more by removing the margin, putting the panel in the bottom right corner and with only two borders (on top of it and to its left) while leaving the rest of the page blank.
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Avistew Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
OR put it on the top left, so that the blank would come AFTER the revelation, in which case it would be Ky's brain. Right now it's a big blank before the revelation, which isn't as meaningful.
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RevivedDragon Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That last page... that page... :XD:
The simplicity and one frame really emphasizes the slapstick humor in this.
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:icondoomdragon:
Doomdragon Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I had no opinion on Heather before... I love her now *drools a little*...
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RenegadeSaint Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
OK, now I *really* want to launch an angry cat at Heather. She's HORRIBLE.

I want to see Fara giving Heather an earful, at the very least.
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CrazyChief Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012
I like how Rain turns her head and has a confused look on her face and say "Kylie?" Heather I think you may have screwed up there
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Annihilare Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Student Artist
Kylie's face.
Oh man.
That's awesome.
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:iconanimasword:
Animasword Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Will Rain past the test thanks to Heather?
How will Ky react to this new infomation?
And how does Heather feel about all of this?
Find out next time on Dragonba- *shot*

Oh and that experimental page was really effective, but I'm not sure if it'll work for every single plot twist, so it may be a one time only thing.
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:iconkalistina:
kalistina Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Reminds me of a few comic strips, for some reason. It works, as far as I'm concerned! :)
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coffinstufferd Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
I see what you tried to do with pg 211 but I think it would look better as a full page.
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Tomari1 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
what part of this conversation made heater so sure?
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garmthedestroyer Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
I like the second page, I thought it was hilarious.
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:iconmayfirerose:
mayfirerose Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I second this
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:iconkirukachan:
KirukaChan Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This whole fiasco is going to end with Fara going next door and talking it out with her fists.
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DCHorror Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Professional Filmographer
I like the second page, but I think it might have actually stood better on it's own.
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AuraVampyre Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
I love it. But it makes it feel like the chapter is ending. Which if it is, great, if not, great!
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:iconnevermorefox:
NevermoreFox Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i like the little frame at the bottom. It ads a tad bit of humor on a serious page.
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:iconthealmightymexican:
TheAlmightyMexican Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
Oh snap!
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:iconxallamax:
Xallamax Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Student Digital Artist
That does -NOT- count as a second page, woman! Not at all! None! Get back to the drawing board this instant and entertain me!!!

Also, how in the name of all that is sacred did she find rain out? >>
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:iconechic10:
echic10 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Professional Photographer
2nd page is fail!
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:icongimmefuelgimmefire:
GimmeFuelGimmeFire Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This comic just keeps getting better and better! :D I love it!!
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:iconundertaker972:
Undertaker972 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
say what?! this isnt gonna be good
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:iconon2xsecretprobation:
On2XSecretProbation Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's hilarious! But poor Rain is going to be so anxious if she finds out she's been found out. She works so hard to pass...
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chihuahua0 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Student Writer
:lol:

That cut was classic.

An alternative way you could have done this was to fill up that page a little more with Heather slowly walking into the panel, her standing there, and then her saying the line.

But this works as fine.
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:iconmusetry:
Musetry Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
XDDD YES! Now things can go properly!
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:iconiccolo:
iccolo Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
i love the second page
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Ryu890 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012
Whabidjickaa....Transciever! Transciever!



On that note, apparently my brother, for all his faults, is a particularly skilled Transciever. He saw the image in your little avatar-proflile-thingymabob, and automatically assumed you were a boy. O.o

For better or for worse. Probably worse. You're honestly one of the most convincing transgirls I've seen. ^^;
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