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RAIN p.24 - Reputation by JocelynSamara RAIN p.24 - Reputation by JocelynSamara
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I think it’s abundantly clear by now that I like lots of dialogue, but this page has been toned down rather graciously. Originally, I had an entire dialogue in place with Maria telling some funny story, that random boy trying to ask Rain out, and of course, Rain herself just being neurotic. Then a few pages later, I reread this page and thought it sounded AWFUL. So bad in fact, that I just deleted all of the dialogue. With no dialogue bubbles, the “silent” page kinda spoke to. Then the better idea of having Rain narrate over the scene while this short montage of events occurs came to me. And that worked ever so much better. What everyone's actually saying, we just leave up to your imagination. ^_^

Pay no mind to the random guy. He really is just that: a random guy. After the death glare Maria gave to him, I wouldn’t blame him he ran right out of this comic altogether. And we may never see him again…

Or will we…?

Nah. I didn’t care much for his design, so probably not…

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Rain, all characters and all other aspects of the story are copyright material belonging to me.
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:icondinomaster75:
Dinomaster75 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2014
STAAAAAAAAAAARRRRE
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:iconjamieagatharose:
JamieAgathaRose Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"Nah. I didn’t care much for his design, so probably not…"

And yet... :giggle:
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:iconwiinner159:
Wiinner159 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013
Just curious but am I the only one who'd actually stare back at Maria if she gave me that stare? I do awkwardly weird things sometimes, it's just a thing that makes me, well me, and who can argue that?
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:icondreisteine:
dreisteine Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015
You wouldn't stare back.

The stare is truly terrifying in person. It touches the darkest depths of your soul as a pure embodiment of fear.

I would know.
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:icondreisteine:
dreisteine Featured By Owner Edited Jan 4, 2015
Oops. Ignore this.
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:iconwiinner159:
Wiinner159 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015
You don't know me, that happens to me every Wednesday, I can take it.
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:icondreisteine:
dreisteine Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015
Imagine the stare you know, multiplied a thousandfold. Then again.

Now you know the power she wields with her glowy red eyes.

😶
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:iconwiinner159:
Wiinner159 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015
Puh, 0 multiplied by 1000 is still zero, so meh, nothing special :P
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:icondreisteine:
dreisteine Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2015
So you imply that the stare you face on a weekly basis is not frightening after all?

:P
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:iconwiinner159:
Wiinner159 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2015
To normal people it supposedly is frightening, but it's never worried me ^_~
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:icondreisteine:
dreisteine Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2015
Heh. But do the eyes really glow?
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:icondragonanthro5213:
DragonAnthro5213 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
im laughing so hard i cant breath!
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:iconeunacis:
Eunacis Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Student Writer
Now, I have to adapt the WHOLE series.
...owwwww...
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:iconpunkking87:
punkking87 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
i really do love how this is like alot of anime i have watched this is just super and i cant wait for more!
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:iconneedsmoreketchup:
NeedsMoreKetchup Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
STAAAAARREEEE....lol LOVE IT
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:icondarkninja1012:
darkninja1012 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011
omfg maria has a death stare and its creepy as hell nice touch there its really good and i like the story so far
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:iconmariatamayothewierdo:
mariatamayothewierdo Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2011  Student General Artist
hahah her stare XD
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:icondark7hero:
Dark7Hero Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011
XDDD
i loved the evil glare scene
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:iconsuki-chan36:
Suki-chan36 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011
Poor Rain. It's not every day you get asked out by an Oompa Loompa.
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:icondivinevalley:
DivineValley Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
All beware Maria's evil stare.
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
It IS pretty terrifying. ^^;
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:iconwindtrick57:
Windtrick57 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
ROBOT! D:<

So that's her secret.
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
It's a secret to everybody! :XD:
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:iconmaiden-of-the-maggot:
Maiden-Of-The-Maggot Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
im lovin marias stare she does! XD its like looking into the pits of hell themselves D:
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
I think I'd rather face hell then be at the recieving end of that glare. ^^;
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:iconmaiden-of-the-maggot:
Maiden-Of-The-Maggot Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
i would rather face satan himself than that glare xD
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:icondolphin64575:
dolphin64575 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
ahahahaha death glare! I really like the silent page with narration! it totally works!
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you! :D
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:iconmusicallover1234:
Musicallover1234 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student Writer
Well I think we figured out who Maria likes, or shes just overly protecting her I prefer the former thou. I like the fact that they are still using "male pronouns and sometimes very loud loudly". That's funny, poor Rain thou. It looks like its going to be an interesting chapter.
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
Speaking from personal experience, some people click right off with adjusting to new pronouns and some people take a very, VERY long time. I have friends that will refer to me using BOTH sets of pronouns in the same sentence... and they'll have known for five years. ^^;

Hence, if Maria and Rudy still don't have it the next day, it's pretty understandable. Perhaps stressful for Rain, but understandable. ^_^
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:iconmusicallover1234:
Musicallover1234 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Student Writer
I understand it because it take time to think of her as a girl. For me I would try to use female pronouns but that's me and I would what to make the person as comfortable as possible. I am sure your friends will get it eventually.
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EllieNoodleSoup Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Good choice, putting it in narrative instead of dialogue. The scene flows a bit better.

Though, feel free to ignore this, but I would've put panel 4 on the background instead of in it's own little panel. The effect would have been better in my opinion.
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
You know, I actually considered doing that. I remember actively thinking about it. I ultimately came to the decision not to though. But having drawn this page over a month ago, I can honestly say I don't remember what my reasoning was anymore (which is only mildly embarrassing). ^^;

I hope it's not too detrimental though. Maybe someday, I'll touch it up. ^_^
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EllieNoodleSoup Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nono, it's not detrimental, it gets the point across just fine. This is just my neurotic sequential art geekiness showing through. (I used to study this sort of thing a LOT)
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:iconnelekra:
Nelekra Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
Cursed male pronouns..
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
Indeed. :nod:
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:iconnelekra:
Nelekra Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
:3
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:iconsharles25:
SHarles25 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011
She's a Tommyknockers! Probably the guy ran and jumped through the window head first from the 3rd or 4th floor =P
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
I bet that hurts like hell... ^_^
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:iconsharles25:
SHarles25 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011
if alive, he probably wont be able to feel anything ;)
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:iconusagiknight:
UsagiKnight Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
This is a good way to start a more plot induced arc, a more happy note can really tell you where the story is going according to drama. But even if its momentary, at least Rain is smiling right now.

I pretty much believe you need a random passerby to really point out certain things. In real life, Maria would probably never admit she has a reputation. So like in a classic B-movie, you got to have that one random guy die just to tell the leads and audience that there is a monster (the metaphor is a little extreme, but I hope you got the point). We may never see that boy again, but he served his purpose of revealing Maria's most likely overprotective nature.

As for the alterations, they really make sense. On an emotional level I think Rain's small narration connects the audience more to the scene. Maria's little story (though as funny as it would've been) might have distracted us from the point of the page, which is to show Rain has friends. Definitely a close contender to Gavin's confrontation with Rain. Its just that good of a page. I just think you should include more Narration scenes later, mostly because you had no narration up to this point. Not like anyone can tell this was improvised.

Either way, great page in all its 'innocence'
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
Incidentally, there are more narrated pages in the future as well. If you liked this, then I am happy to announce that this isn't the last time. ^_^

It is actually the second time she narrates though!
The first time was on page 7 [link]

Although, now that I look at it... it seems this isn't the first appearance of the random guy. Whoa. I... totally didn't even notice that myself... :ohnoes:
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UsagiKnight Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
I guess we are even, the random guy might have appeared in the single digit pages. Also the first pages where Rain narrates (if I'm correct). Oh well, as I said, you need that random person to kind of abuse for the sake of story-telling.

And I do enjoy the narrative moments, really grounds the drama on Rain's current perception. And the way you write makes it feel like we are there to feel what Rain feels. Look forward to more.
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Werewolf-Hero Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Maria is really a robot I knew it.
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
Nah. Just glowy. :XD:
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:iconwerewolf-hero:
Werewolf-Hero Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Youre a robot
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Professional Writer
Oh, we all know that now: [link] ^_^
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:iconwerewolf-hero:
Werewolf-Hero Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I did not know that. Cool
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:iconkinginyellowtatters:
KingInYellowTatters Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
I think Random Guy is my new favorite dark-horse character.

Who will be instrumental to making Jerky McJerkface realize the error of his ways and apologize to Rain, thus freeing him to be called "Gavin" again? RANDOM GUY!

Who will be there to save the day, when everyone else feels helpless and in despair? RANDOM GUY!

Who will be revealed to be the "Ultra-Secret Dark Lord of Darkness?™" RANDOM GUY!

And yes I know #2 and #3 directly conflict, but RANDOM GUY does not care. He's just that type of character!
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
He's a pretty random guy for a random guy. I guess that goes without saying though? Actually, a lot of people seem to like him (for some reason), so I've decided to keep him.

I've even given him a name: Randall Martin Guy (or Rand M. Guy).
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