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RAIN p.19 - Gavin by JocelynSamara RAIN p.19 - Gavin by JocelynSamara
(I’m kinda not feeling so hot today, so I’m sure no one will complain that I’m posting this a couple hours early so I can get some rest…)

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Now that I look at it, I wonder if this page was even necessary. I feel like all it really did was draw things out just a wee bit longer. Well, I guess it helps establish that Rudy’s not a complete jerk… hopefully…

I ended up changing the dialogue on this one a few times too. Maria’s final line, in particular, originally stated that she thought Gavin was being “emo” because “on the off-hand chance Rudy was right about Rain, he’d owe her ever more money.” As amusing as I thought that was, Maria did technically deny that bet. Plus, no matter how I worded it, it just never felt natural. So while a little funny, I don’t think I really liked the line at all. “I hope she slaps him” though, seems more fitting to me… and is potentially still kinda funny.

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GhostofRealality Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011
Well I laughed at the "I hope she slps him" line :D

Interesting so far, I think I'm going to enjoy the rest :popcorn:
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UsagiKnight Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Again, I'm sure you know what I'm going to say. So I'll say this. Rain probably wouldn't have the heart to slap him, nor mean it if she does. I f it were me, someone who would not only discover my secret, but also have my real name would be enough to faint. But either way, this is going to be an important moment for Rain and Gavin.

Either way, they both remembered each other, maybe even laughed, and maybe even shared secrets. Ryan did, it could explain why Gavin is so serious about this meet up.

The one thing I'm sure you will say though, it really isn't a place for Maria and Rudy. No matter how open they are they are still new to Rain. So looking back on the previous pages, there really is no other way out of this.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2011  Professional Writer
Pretty insightful thoughts, as usual. One paragraph in particular is especially interesting, and I may have to refer to it for one of the pages that'll go up this coming week. ^_^
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UsagiKnight Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
I feel honored that you feel that way about my comments, really hope they continue to inspire you in some little way.

It could be that you doing that will make people aware of me, but it really shows you care enough to recommend me to others. I really thank you for that :hug:
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DivineValley Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2011
Serious faced Gavin is serious!!! Aww epic drama I see in the future!
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2011  Professional Writer
Epic drama is a definite possibility. ^_^
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Musicallover1234 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Student Writer
Well this is tense. And feel better.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Professional Writer
It is pretty tense... surprisingly, even for me.

And thank you; I'll do my best. ^_^
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Musicallover1234 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2011  Student Writer
Good to hear. By the way nice avatar I think it fits both your main art and personality,plus it look really good.
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dolphin64575 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
my guess: Rain tries to run to Aunt Fara and they all have a good awkward chat
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