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Awk~ward-! ^_^

Well, that probably could have gone better…

To avoid confusion, I’m just going to come right out and tell you this new boy that Rain’s bumped into is named Rudy. He’s Maria’s little brother. Normally, I’d prefer to let the story do the talking, but as I was reviewing the story before posting this, I realized that no one actually addresses him by name for another six pages. So, rather than having comments consist of people calling him “that kid” or something for roughly another two weeks, I’ll just make it easy for you and tell you straight out: it’s Rudy. ^_^

On a side note, Gavin and Maria are still sitting at the lunch table where Rain was eating, waiting for her to come back. Originally, I considered showing them divvying up the remainder of her lunch for humor’s sake. But after more thought, that just seemed like a really jerk thing to have them do… ^^;

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Turai Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
I'm actually deeply disturbed, is it really that bad that you could get in trouble with the school staff for this where you live?
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8947jts Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2015
I believe that this is a catholic school, which (for religious reasons or otherwise) are usually very harsh with anything LGBT+ related.
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foggyland1 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011
hey i've read rain up to date, then cycled back through all the x-tra rain things and i just wondered something as i begun to read through rain for the second time:

u said in the question and answer page that rain uses 'padding' to give her womanly curves, if this is indeed true couldn't a type of 'padding' be used to cover what may have been seen in the last page and discussed here.

by the way - i reeeaallly don't want to sound whiney or nit picky but just wondering, curiosity you know.

ps. cant wait for the next ones.
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AmmyKaabiiPupupu Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2011
...Shit, almost forgot she's at a religious school...
She has one of those "YOU ARE THE INCARNATION OF THE DEVIL DIE DIE DIE" speeches in store doesn't she? poor girl...
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Tigerfestivals Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
If they give her that kind of speech, they're not a very good religious school...
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Enkidude Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2011
I facepalmed on the last page.
Now; Forehead, meet my laptop's keyboard.

uuuuuszrisrtttttgs
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2011  Professional Writer
At this rate, there'll end up being a page that causes you to run and jump into a brick wall. I mean, I probably wouldn't recommend that though.
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Enkidude Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2011
I'll be sending my medical bill. :P
Nah, I won't. This is good stuff!
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Undertaker972 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2011
wow rudy's about to rat Rain out lol
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IrateResearchers Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
dun dun DUUN
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DivineValley Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
Well shit the little snot is gonna squel!!!! I'l get the rope!!!!
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Musicallover1234 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Student Writer
He might be chatty but maybe he won't tell of that particular event, and if he does well...then I guess Rain's screwed then. If she is found out then maybe that accommodate her or something like that. But whatever happens happens, so I guess we will find out and it really starting to get good.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
I'm thrilled to hear you're liking the direction. :D
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Musicallover1234 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2011  Student Writer
Yah.
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animeunderwaterfan1 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
uh oh looks like trouble :lo:
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
Indeed, it does! ^_^
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kidotrar Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I have one thing to say about the panel layout of this page. The way you have the four bottom panels even, it makes it hard to tell if the progression goes:

[1] [2]
[3] [4]

or

[1] [3]
[2] [4]

Granted, it can kind of work either way, the first way I listed seems to work better, and the confusion alone interrupts the flow of the comic. I had to skim ahead through dialog to make sure I'd be reading it "right" before I read it, which took away a bit of the wit in the moment, and the seconds it took trying to figure that alone disturbed the "reading zone". (Like, feeling I was in the comic, as opposed to remembering I'm reading it.)

On the bright side, when your comic reads smoothly, I can lose myself into most of the pages, even when you're only posting one at a time. That can be hard to do, since it paces it slow already. But the panels generally move along quickly and it reads pretty fast.

What I'd do a situation like this is offset the space between frames ever so slightly, so that a definite direction is taken. Those few extra seconds of not having to pick a course and stick with it will save your readers the stress of "OHCRAP AM I DOING THIS RIGHT OHCRAPOHCRAPOHCRAP" or, you know, something less panicky for people who aren't as neurotic as me.

For example

[stuff] [things]
[things] [stuff]

Keeping them on the same row, but slightly changing where the middle divider falls will show that you read the top row, then the bottom. It may throw off your symmetry, but it's such a subtle navigation trick that (in my opinion) it makes a page look better and even more balanced in the end.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
Sorry, about the confusion. I was a little worried that people might have trouble with it. It is:
[1][2]
[3][4]

And in the event that this might occur in the near future, that will continue to be the case.

That said, your "stuff and things" example brings up a good point, so I'll try to adopt that for the future in hopes that I can avoid further confusion.
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kidotrar Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
It's actually something I didn't even notice until I started reading The Meek. I'm not sure why, but I picked up on her panel layout more than I have when reading other comic books and manga, and it just clicked...like learning to read, kind of. So it's something I pay a lot of attention to now. Once you see it, you can't unsee it, and all that... it just screams at me.

And especially since I've been storyboarding so much for Spoiler Alert, and helping Melissa with her comic (her panel progression needed some work starting out, too) it's something I'm constantly thinking about when I read comics now. How can I make my panels more unique, more readable, or stand out, to make the most of them, etc. So I'm glad to help where I can. =)
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UsagiKnight Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Maybe that is why I like your profile pages from Rain, Shangri-La, COH:FF, etc. It at least gives me a reference to go back to if I missed anything. And even if it contains information it doesn't reveal anything. Just a grasp of the character and how s/he would move and interact in a situation. Maybe that is one reason I enjoy buying the artbooks and profiles of my favorite manga, always something new to learn.

As for what happened I knew that was what happened. Logically it makes sense that that is how Gavin and Maria will find out. To put it this way, chaos causes story evolution. Knowing Rain, she would be unable to tell Maria and Gavin on her own. And again, thank god its Rudy.

Don't think he his a bratty kid, he doesn't know Rain so he's just saying what he thought about the new girl. Again, I believe that Rudy is a good kid. Considering how open he is about his own feelings he was motivated to think about Rain before possibly causing problems for Rain. But he's young, so he has to tell someone he knows he can trust. So that is how information goes. Of coarse a lot of this is speculation, but either way I love seeing how things play out.

Again, love the japanese comedy of the page. Switching between Rain and Rudy again was one of those funny/awkward moments that you can't help but laugh at, continue momentum, and build suspense to the next page. Really glad the New Girl arc is going well now. Though to me having a glance up the skirt is embarassing whether you have something to hide or not. Trust me, I know.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
I like character bios for that reason too. If I buy a new game (especially an RPG with lots of characters), you can bet the very first thing I'm going to do is open up the booklet and read about the cast. But not everyone looks at that stuff. There's nothing wrong with that, mind you; I don't want it to be required reading or anything. I wouldn't be a very good writer if the ONLY way you could ever learn very basic parts of the story is through supplemental material. Still, I like it to be there to clarify things if people want it.

Rudy's a good kid. He's just impulsive. But among most of the readers, I think he's got a lot of enemies right now thanks to said impulsive actions. If I'm telling the story correctly, peoples' opinions of the characters will occasionally fluctuate. Even good people do bad things sometimes and vice versa, people change, you don't always quite know a person, etc.; these are ideas I make frequent use of in my writing. Rain is no exception.

The switching thing is a little been done, but it never gets old to me. I just couldn't help using it here. Thankfully, it worked out pretty well. ^_^
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UsagiKnight Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
And again you prove your awesomeness. I have so many instruction books for the same reason. And again, I agree they are nice to have.

Feel really interested in Rudy now with that idea of impulsiveness. Hopefully things will turn out well for everyone.
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Suki-chan36 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
Say... Is Rain using her guy voice when she says, "Sorry about that! I wasn't looking where I was going?"
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
That was kind of a tricky one. Technically, she should be speaking in her girl voice. I thought it might get convoluted if I wrote the whole sentence twice to suit both voices though. So I just went with what you see above.

Sorry if it was unclear and/or confusing. I'm not really sure how to fix that...
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Suki-chan36 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
You're right, it is a rather tricky one to solve. Sadly, no ideas on this front. Thanks for clarifying, though! Anyone else who gets confuzzled can just read this, I suppose.
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Windtrick57 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
Poor Rain indeed. ._.

How could you do this to her Lynn?? D:< It's only the 17th page!!
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
That's right. It IS only the 17th page. That means there's plenty of time for things to get better...

...hopefully. ^^;
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majorkerina Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Student Writer
Poor Rain ;_;...
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:iconjocelynsamara:
JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
Yeah, it is a pretty sticky situation... :(
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majorkerina Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Student Writer
*hopes for the best for poor Rain*.
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dragon8writer Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
This is my take on what might happen next - in other words, Rain's Chocolate Panties! :D [link]

It involves Sarah, of course. :P (You drew the picture of her, you should have expected it. :P )
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
Chocolate...? :O_o:

This, I have to see...
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dragon8writer Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
It's not unnecessarily dirty. :P Sarah does everything with chocolate.
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Maiden-Of-The-Maggot Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
THAT FOOL O:< he better not start tellin tales!! >:C
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
I think it might be a little late for that... ^^;
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Maiden-Of-The-Maggot Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
:iconfuuuplz:
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dragon8writer Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
Did you not put tg in the tagline of this one, by the way? 0.o
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
No, I did. "TG" is among a short list of keywords that are copy/pasted among the tags of every single new Rain piece posted. DeviantArt just takes it's sweet time to catch up with my stuff for some reason. This is actually the third time in this comic alone this has happened.

What annoys me more this time around, is that I've actually noticed a lot of things posted AFTER my page ARE showing up in the Search, but this page still isn't visible where it belongs.
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dragon8writer Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
*Nods* Yeah, that happens to me sometimes.

I often hit the edit button and retype the tg or type it in a few times in order to poke the search.
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Q9R42 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is turning out to be a real fail day for Rain, let me tell you.
I love that you made it so unpredictable. I didn't expect that things would "take flight" that fast.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
Not. As. Planned!
Seriously, poor Rain... :(

I'm so very happy to hear that! I'm glad I can surprise you, even at this early stage of the story. ^_^
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Q9R42 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I thought that you were going to play around a little, before establishing a mutual understanding amongst the main characters. I really like that things are going a bit faster at this part. Well done.
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dragon8writer Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011
You could keep it quiet, you know! Yeeesh.....*Grumbles* But that's not really a little brother thing to do, huh?

Well, it CAN be a jerk thing, but it depends. It might be a "If you scared her off, i totally get to have her sandwhich."

"Well, if YOU scared her off, i'm taking the banana." (...only... better?_
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011  Professional Writer
He's not just a little brother though... he's also a "chatty Cathy". ^^;

Well, I guess so. If Rain never comes back, they'd sort of be doing the right thing by not letting it go to waste. Plus, I could see the two of them turning it into yet another bet...
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dragon8writer Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
Oh, definitely. :P It's only jerkish if they're going to take it period. (And I can totally see them blaming the other one for driving her off. :P )
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PrincessJessica Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011
Oh no...! He's gonna tell them....

Now I'm on the edge of my seat
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011  Professional Writer
It's going to be a long couple of days... :|
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Warmenx Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011
Well she is really screwed. Just hope someone would come in and stop him from spilling Rain's secret.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011  Professional Writer
Well, I guess anything can happen. ^_^
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StoryTypist Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2011
Aw come on. You know she's trying to keep it a secret! Jeez man, have some respect! D:

DUCT TAPE AT READY.
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