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RAIN p.15 - It's a Small World by JocelynSamara RAIN p.15 - It's a Small World by JocelynSamara
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The title was supposed to be "It's a Small World After All". SmackJeeves and Comic Fury allow long page titles; so why not DA? :(

Gavin and Maria, once again so close to the truth, and yet so far. Rainís compelling response to Gavinís question (ie. - running the hell away) has helped to keep her secret safe for the time being, but was that really the best move?

I have to be honest. Iím not crazy about this page. Looking back, I think I couldíve probably condensed this page and the last page into one to make things move along a little quicker. But then Iíd have had less time to establish foreshadowing for Maria in the last page, and Rainís fear of discovery on this page. Okay, so maybe condensing isnít quite what Iím looking for, but I still feel like I could have done better with these two pages.

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eleventhdr Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
come on hehow hrd can ti be to figure out that this boy is becoming a girl!
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NoyTelinu Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012
Even things that can be obvious (this isn't) can be hard to figure out.

Not to mention that finding people with the same last names can happen easily. Especially if your family is huge...
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2011  Professional Writer
That would be incorrect. A transgirl is still a girl. She is not a boy and never was; she is a girl (regardless of physical anatomy). And she is not becoming anything; she is expressing herself outwardly how she feels inside.
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seeker-of-revelation Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
It's time for Amazing True Facts!

Did you know that the ride in Disneyland is simply named it's a small world? It's amazing, but true! The words "after all," while contained in the lyrics of the popular song, are not actually in the song title or the eponymous ride's name! Therefore, the title of this comic on deviantART is accidentally more faithful to Disney's canon than the ones on SmackJeeves and Comic Fury!

Tune in next time, and you might just learn some more Amazing True Facts!
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Professional Writer
I... really didn't know that. :O_o: Well, now I don't feel quite so bad.

So... I wonder if I should be damning the other sites now for allowing too MANY letters... ^^;
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UsagiKnight Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
Its your first webcomic, so it can be forgiven that you felt weird about these last pages. I think you need to just keep going and hope you evolve. That will always be best. Its the same advice you gave with Tower Artist, that no matter how it was written its where I am right now as a creator. This pacing, is where you are too. It may not be the best, but it isn't horrible, making it a great foundation to build on.

Now to the page, love how everything just exploded the moment Ryan was mentioned. Though you could read it fast, it feels natural to have a slight suspended time. The same way you feel when something new and foreboding comes to play. Though I also love that like real life Maria and Gavin still haven't thought to beyond their bet.

This is also a good time to bring this up. Me and my sis talked about how easy it is to read comics. I disagreed saying you can't just read the words and look at the pictures. Its the same as skimming the words in a book. For some reason its like watering down the emotion in the pictures. Sometimes on a 19 pg. ch. I take 30 minutes. I guess to feel every sound, breath, and sensation. It really is amazing how comics can be so much more than a bunch of pictures. I guess that is one of the many reasons I get so much out of Rain and hope it helps you find your rhythm. Trust me, you are doing awesome and really do inspire me with every new page. So trust me when I say that trying out new things is important to this point of your life and Rain's too.

Really sorry about the title :hug: creatively its an injustice. At least they let you post it rather than keeping it off because of too many panels
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Professional Writer
Good point. Leave it to me to offer valuable advice and forget to follow it myself. ^^;

Now that mention it, it might not have been a bad idea if I had an extra panel depicting a moment of awkward silence to accentuate that "suspended time". Oh, well. 20/20 hindsight, and all that. I'm not changing anything on this page or any that's already been posted, but it's good to keep these things in mind.

I don't remember where it was, but I read once that "Manga is actually meant to be read quickly the first time. Soak in the story the first time, then read it again to get all of the finer details." I always thought that was an odd explanation though. I mean, I don't think it's wrong; but I don't think your preferred method is wrong either. Honestly, I think I've used both methods (and perhaps even your sister's too). I guess it depends on the comic or manga in particular that I'm reading.

Yeah, I'd be pretty mad if they limited how many panels I could use...
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UsagiKnight Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Well, manga is always a test of what we can do. So can only hope to do better next time. And the way we all experience manga is what makes every piece memorable in so many ways.

Love to see how it works, 'you cannot have more than 4 panels' 'why' 'because we rule all that's why' 'stupid internets'. All in that sci-fi, female, brittish, computer voice to for accuracy.
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dolphin64575 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
ehehehehe... poor sweetheart! of course, she could always say she suddenly had to use the bathroom... love Maria's reaction!
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Professional Writer
That would probably be the most tactful way out of this. ^_^

Heh. Maria, ever the opportunist!
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shadowlord19 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
THis is weird. Nice work though.
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Undertaker972 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
o man poor Rain, lol. i feel so bad for her
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SHarles25 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
They look nice and one them got background of good friendship, it would have been the best moment to tell the truth, no setting could have been perfect, I mean more ideal somehow =P
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Honestly, you're right. That was probably her best chance right there. Unfortunately, I think she just panicked. I mean, she'd like to say she was prepared for anything, but I don't think she quite saw that coming. ^^;
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SHarles25 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
no, but if at least, I mean if only Rain frozen and took a minute to think, maybe it wouldn't be looking so strange =p

Now they will think He is dead instead of right in front of them :S
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Musicallover1234 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Student Writer
I would think she knows something after running away. I would have thought it would have been funny if she had said I an him, but I want to be a girl, would he still like her then, hmmm. While it's getting interesting that's for sure. Maria's right she owns him five bucks. I love how Rain looks in the third panel all white with that embarrassed and shy look, anime style.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Yeah. Running probably wasn't the swiftest move (or best move rather, it looked like she was moving QUITE swiftly).
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Musicallover1234 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Student Writer
If I ran in that situation I would be too.
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DivineValley Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
Gavin: 0
Maria: 0 (still gets $5 though)

Yes lets run away!!! Not the best reaction but still funny as hell.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
I think it's safe to say that even with that score, Maria has won this round. :XD:
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Maiden-Of-The-Maggot Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
WOW OH! O:
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LightningMegaRaichu Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
No wonder rain runs that fast.
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animeunderwaterfan1 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
run rain run :lol:
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Uncle-Ben Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
Actually, the expressions and conversation seem to add to it. I'm thinking you should keep it this way unless you have reason to speed things up.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
I'm glad you approve. ^_^

I probably wouldn't have changed it anyway. Laziness is a terrible thing, let me tell you. ^^;
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StoryTypist Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
Good show rain! Jolly good show! I salute thee :iconsaluteplz:.
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dragon8writer Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
*Hugs your pages better*

*Squishy hugs you, too*

Oh, and did I mention: I'm doing a mini-comic! :D *Decided to stop worrying about perfection and simply draw*
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
You hugged my... page...? :O_o:

Congrats on the mini-comic. Good luck with that! :D
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dragon8writer Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
Yes; it's a violation, I know, so I hope you'll forgive me. ;_;
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
A... violation...? :O_o:

What am I forgiving now...? :dummy:
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dragon8writer Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
I hugged your page. ;_;

*feels so dirty*

*he thinks*
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DCHorror Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Professional Filmographer
See, that would be a cruel set of people to name two kids who were cousins with names that were practically anagrams of each other.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
It would be cruel, but I guess it could happen...
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IrateResearchers Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
see, right there? I would've been suspicious and decided she somehow knows Ryan in an embarrassing or traumatic way.
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Very true. Surely, they must suspect SOMETHING. I don't know if they could get it right though.
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IrateResearchers Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
probably not. comic characters are never omniscient...

unless they are.
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Chicken-Yuki Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010   Traditional Artist
RUNE FOREST, RUN!!!

....wait, wrong media.
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PrincessJessica Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
LOL poor Rain.
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Nelekra Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
LOL!!!!! I had this happen before it sucked!
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Me too. And running away didn't make it any better for me in the long run. ^^;
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Nelekra Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
^^; sorry to hear, did for me. Ah gotta love the quick change ;) (record time from full female to full male was 3 minutes :D!)
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
That's pretty impressive timing, actually. I'm sure I've had pretty close times myself, trying to change in a hurry while someone waits for me to unlock the door or something. Heh. The quick change IS great like that.

It's kinda dorky on my part, but I've always amused myself at how being like this has made me have to be a bit of a master of disguise, ready to change who I am at a moment's notice. ^^;
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Nelekra Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
Yeah I know what you mean xD I had my close calls and was like O______O if he literally came in 5 seconds earlier... or even 2 seconds. ( i had the mailman come knock on the door for Ashley Rozi *he said it very loud* but literally 5 seconds before my bro and his entourage was there in the "foyer" but left to go downstairs xD

Yeah true xD! Are you on hormones or anything :)? It's so cool you found a wife who loves you for you!
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Yikes. Sounds like a freaky situation! :ohnoes:

Sadly, I'm still not on hormones. There's a long story to that. But I'm designating it my New Year's Resolution to get on them in 2011, because I don't think I can handle NOT transitioning anymore.

Honestly, I still can't believe I found her either. I thought love between a pre-op transsexual and a normal woman was something that only happened in some story of mine. ;) I guess that sorta adds plausability to my writing though. ^^;
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Nelekra Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010
Yeah xD cute face :)

Nor am I so it's cool :P oh cool then ! Good luck! I hope it goes well with you!

Yeah =\ me too.. Yeah it does xD
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Suki-chan36 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2010
Maria: Rain? You okay? You look a little uncoloured...

Methinks Rain's amscraying will lead to problematic situations. I know she's had a stressful day, and coming face-to-face with your ex-best friend can be rather shocking, but Rain's probably going to be found out if she keeps things up like this. *gives Rain a large, freshly-baked cookie to bolster her confidence*
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JocelynSamara Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2010  Professional Writer
Yeah, I don't think Rain was quite as prepared as she thought she was. ^^;

Oh well. I guess she'll just have to make the most of it. And hey, at least she got a big cookie out of it. :XD:
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